I would throw in an example of how such things as you suggest actually work. For example, and I know this is a fictional show, but Mae Jemison (sp?), a US astronaut, was inspired by Urhura on the original Star Trek show.
Great idea, thank you! I'll have to think about where to add that in. Possibly just before the last sentence.
OK, here's what I've put at the end of the last full paragraph (just before "I hope that..."):
Positive depictions of minority groups in traditionally under-represented fields of work are essential to their aspirations, even if they are fictional. For example, US astronaut Mae Jemison cites the role of Uhura, the black female commander in the TV series Star Trek, as a strong influence on her decision to pursue a career in science.
That's awesome - a beam of hope! Thank you.
I think the point is made about the shopping when you mention that it is happening- if they don't get it any mention of it may make them think STRIDENT. It should be clear what the problem is and that it may upset a woman scientist.
Append the stats. The scrupulous accuracy is good, and the implied comment about Women in Measuring makes the accuracy read as if it is delivered with a cocked Eyebrow of Disapproval. Snee hee heee.
The consensus here and on DW seems to be that I should leave it as it is. I am inclined to agree. Especially since I'm writing to British people. ;)
Oho, I hadn't even thought about the irony of sending scrupulously accurate statistics as a response to a book about making measurements! Appended they shall be.
Append the statistics. OK, I would append the statistics here in Germany, I'm not sure how things work in UK.
But the very fact that such a letter is necessary makes me rage. And makes me terribly sad at the same time.
Anyway, I might move the sentence "I do not feel that this is a balance of images that will engender inspiration among women to work in the field of metrology, or indeed in science and engineering generally." further up, into the first paragraph. Not in this form of course, but the main statement should be there. I think there are enough people (and how sad this makes me!) who will not realize what you are aiming at before they really read the sentence, so it should come earlier. But that's only my opinion, of course.
And "engender inspiration among women" should probably be "inspire women"!
The only thing that worried me about your suggestion is that it doesn't fit with the narrative I used to build up to the message. I couldn't figure out a way to fit in easily, so I compromised by putting this as the subject line of the e-mail: "Concerns about diversity in published NPL material".
Would it kill you to just be a bit darker?
I was, however, considering attaching a photo of a pair of crumpled panties, captioned with, "These are my knickers. In a twist. It's your fault."
You are so awesome.
More and more, the raging lack of diversity around me drives me up the fucking wall. Most of TV, movies, positions of authority... it's all white male white male white male. I'm giving "Prime Suspect" a try, and I swear I don't think I've seen a single non-white cop, and only 1 woman!
So, I just wanted to say, colour is beautiful! Fight the power!
Thank you. Doing my best!
On the TV front: I think this might be why I like NCIS. I know the boss is a white male, but he's so un-godlike and the female characters have so much airtime that it doesn't bother me as much as it would otherwise.
I like the bit about a bunch of white dudes.
I hope they change the way race and gender are represented. TV shows are still slowly changing the course where I can only think of one show I watch that has a non-white female lead (NIKITA) and another show that has a black cast member in authority (FRINGE). Most of the Western media is slanted towards whites. I like seeing variety in the pictures and media because it more accurately reflects the world at large.
Nikita features Maggie Q. *hearteyes* doccy
recommended Fringe to me recently. Your mention of it is too much of a coincidence to pass up. I'm going to have to watch this show!
that's a great letter. i admire your use of your awesome writing skills for great justice! as an antidote for frustrations with inequality, might i suggest the upcoming Ada Lovelace Day
Great idea! I shall endeavour to write a journal entry about my undergraduate research supervisor on the train this evening.
Thank you. I'm feeling kind of down about it right now, though, because it's been a week since I sent it and I've had no response. Not even an acknowledgment. :/