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Four stops on the Piccadilly Line [20101019|11:00]
Mad Scientess Jane Expat
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Four stops on the Piccadilly Line

A man in a suit boards the train,
a determined look on his face.
He sits, puts his briefcase on his knees,
removes his tie.
He folds the tie carefully.

It's 10:42 AM.
He should be at work, but in an exhilarating impulse
he left the office 20 minutes before a meeting.
Just walked out.
He is going to Heathrow.
He is going to buy a plane ticket to India.

He turns his phone off.
He has no signal underground, so this is merely a gesture.
It feels significant, though.
No one can find him. No one knows where he is.

A wave of loneliness engulfs him.
Horrified, he dives off at the next stop.
His forgotten tie flies off his lap,
flutters in the air defiantly,
crumples to the floor.
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From: pbristow
2010-10-19 18:52 (UTC)
[CONTEMPLATIVE SILENCE]

[CONTEMPLATIVE APPLAUSE]
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[User Picture]From: nanila
2010-10-31 17:29 (UTC)
[Contemplative bow]
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[User Picture]From: cheekytubemouse
2010-10-19 18:59 (UTC)
I heart this.
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[User Picture]From: nanila
2010-10-31 17:30 (UTC)
Once again a case where LJ needs a "like" button, perhaps.
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[User Picture]From: danaid_luv
2010-10-19 22:54 (UTC)
Your ability to narrate any particular scene is, at the risk of sounding trite, or removing your effort, a gift. I've come across several blogs where people attempt to do the same--give a voice to a moment & each time I find myself thinking, 'Huh, they're a poor-man's Nanila...'

Thank you for continuing to share pieces with us.
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[User Picture]From: nanila
2010-10-31 17:31 (UTC)
I'm flattered. Thank you. It's something I aim to be good at, but am never quite certain if I succeed.
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[User Picture]From: nanila
2010-10-31 17:32 (UTC)
It's that "I'm trapped, but the trap is less scary than not being in the trap, so I'm staying" feeling.
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